Talk Balk on Women and Eating Disorders

I'm glad that I managed to get my point across, since I was worried about the clarity of the piece. I will definitely take into consideration adding a more convincing point about new-gen. models expressing different beauty than the 80's. On my personal piece, I do feel that it helps to support my point that the media is not entirely to blame and helps show the other side. It definitely, I think needs a bit of editing and reduction. I do think that there is a lesson in it, and I'm going to attempt to make that same point while being a bit more concise.

Thanks for your feedback!