Post-Write on Women and Eating Disorders Essay

I feel that my paper is in decent shape right now. To me, it’s a fairly good length (about 2 pages.) I’m very opinionated about the topic and I have a lot to say about it as is clear when reading it. I definitely feel I need to do a little bit of cleaning up and editing, and I’m sure something is off grammatically, somewhere. I’m a little worried about a few things, whether my ideas are clearly enough stated, and whether they sound right (since I like many people tend to write like I speak sometimes.) I also wonder if the portion with my personal experiences is too long, I know we were supposed to include our opinion on influence and personal experience, but I also realize it isn’t an auto-biography. Any feedback from anyone would be great!